DPI 1: Follow up email

Follow up email and request of portfolio review letter:

1. Thank you again for taking the time to respond to me.
2. Based on your feedback in our previous email, I used your advice to create a project of 10 photos, inspired by your work.
3. I would appreciate it, if you could take a few minutes and look over my photos. Then, if you could give me additional feedback about my successes as a photographer and the areas I could improve. This will help immensely as a student photographer. 
4. Thank you again for your time. I look forward to hearing back from you.
5. Attached is a PPT of my photos. Or you can view them on Blog at: __________.blogspot.com